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People fall in love.
Lovers remain,
people break up.
Lost it all, no gain.

Another person,
joining the scene.
You feel happy,
nothing in between.

Again distraction,
catches the eye.
Your lover says
Forever goodbye.

Conquering dark thoughts.
Crashing your goal.
A vicious burn,
ripping through your soul?
I tried making each block in a pattern:
5
4
4
5
for the syllables that is.
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This poem is about people breaking up, falling in love again and losing the love again. vicious circle in the game called love.
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"feelings" contest in :iconwallofdestiny:
journal: [link]
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This poem is all mine, MINE i tells ya!
i didn't use anything from others.
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Have fun!
take care
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Booky-TrueIdentities Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
nice, though why the "?" at the end, im curious
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arcainwolf Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
I don't know hehe, but it makes you think and gives that extra.. thingy to the poem :p
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Booky-TrueIdentities Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
yup it does
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007Balel Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student Writer
It fits your desired pattern perfectly :)
I really like this, as well as the theme.
The flow is also good :)
Well done.
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:iconarcainwolf:
arcainwolf Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
thank you :)
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007Balel Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student Writer
:)
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Behind-love456 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
:iconiloveitplz:
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arcainwolf Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
hehe ty :p
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Behind-love456 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
welcome~=D really like it!
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Warriorfanatic99 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
This is so amazingly awesome I love it! :heart: :iconiloveitplz:
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arcainwolf Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
thanks! :p
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Warriorfanatic99 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
:P No prob! :)
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ilike2draw Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011   Writer
I liked this as well; it definitely flowed.

I honestly don't think you need the last stanza, since it doesn't really "go" with the other stanzas you have written.
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:iconarcainwolf:
arcainwolf Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
ye i know, gonna delete the last one :)
thanks :D
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ilike2draw Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011   Writer
You're welcome.
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Saundo Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
I think it is good, and counted the syllables, they are all right in each block. Good work.
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:iconarcainwolf:
arcainwolf Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
thank for checking and collecting!
just wanted to try something different in this poem.
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Saundo Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
You're very welcome.
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